The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The two pie charts give information about the average value of three types of nutrients, all of which
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if consumed in excessive amounts in the USA
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the largest harm of Sodium and Saturated Fat
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dinner
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, eating
snacks
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whereas
added sugar is concerned to be
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snacks
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breakfast
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of total harm
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dinner
and lunch respectively. The figure for
breakfast
and
snacks
is accounted for equally at 14%.
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, saturated fat gains the largest segment of average damage to
dinner
while
26% for lunch. It is important to
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snacks
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breakfast
. With regard to the
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snacks
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dinner
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23%. 16% and 19% are related to
breakfast
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the same order.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, snacks, breakfast with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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