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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist’s work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist’s work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the distribution of
what
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students did graduated
from
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with
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 Anthropology Bachelor’s degree
.
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Furthermore
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, the table provides information about how much they earned after five years of working.
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, almost half of the graduates occupied
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full-time jobs.
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, one to two of the students get more than $100.000 after 5 years on their jobs.
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, Anthropology students mostly
preffered
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prefer
 to work full-time. The
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 and unemployed graduates made up %15 and %12, respectively,
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, slightly over %20 of them are working full-time and part-time with higher degree studies and not knowing what to do. In terms of the salaries after five years in the sectors, there are 3 types of
employments
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such
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 as freelance consultants,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 sector,
private
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and private
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 companies. The higher-paid
works
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workers
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 are
in
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the
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freelance consultants and
goverment instutitions
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government institutions
 with
the
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percentages of %40 and %50, respectively.
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, the least-paid areas ($25.000-40.000) are the same.
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