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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive at the destination. Write a letter to the post office manager. In your letter, •give details of the situation •describe the documents •say what action you want the post office to take

#documents #post #destination #office #manager #•give #situation #•describe #•say #action
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
regarding
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to track my parcel location, which
is
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 not delivered on time. I
have
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sent
few
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a few
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 important documents to my friend one week ago. The
courier
 service offered two options for delivery, which
was
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 based on the price factor. I selected the high price one to deliver my
courier
 on time. It
supposed
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 to be delivered within 3 days. The documents are very important to me. The packaging of the parcel is in
white
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 envelope with
courier
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a courier
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 label on it, which shows
receiver's
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the receiver's
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 and sender's information on it.
i
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I
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 have attached the
reciept
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receipt
 and copy of
label
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the label
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 with
this
 letter. I want you to take some serious steps towards my concern.
i
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I
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 would be glad if you
will
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 find out the parcel's location and let me know the reason for
delay
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the delay
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. Please contact me to provide me
updates
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with updates
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 on my
courier
.
Thanking
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 you in advance, John
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coherence cohesion
The letter's structure is reasonably clear, but paragraphs should be better developed with each containing a single, clear purpose. Consider using a separate paragraph for introducing the issue, describing the documents, and stating the required action.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, provide specific details about the documents to show why they are important, include exact dates and references, if possible, and clearly articulate the action you expect from the post office.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • postal service
  • registered mail
  • tracking number
  • envelope
  • urgent
  • confidential
  • compensation
  • investigation
  • documentation
  • destination
  • customer service
  • resolution
  • discrepancy
  • correspondence
  • delivery
  • timeline
  • claim
  • follow-up
  • liability
  • accountability
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