The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The graph shown above illustrated
number
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the number
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of
hours
per day that
tourists
from China, America, Turkey, and
Brazilian
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spent doing leisure activities
while
on holiday in Greece, in August 2019. The sequence mentioned before was drawn from left to right in the chart. There are 3
activies
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activities
explained, at the beach
colored
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blue, reading books
with
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in
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orange, and visiting places pictured in
gray
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grey
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. Reading books
are
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the leading leisure
activites
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activity
done longest by both Chinese and American
tourists
,
although
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the chinese
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chinese
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Chinese
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spent 8
hours
, which is 3 more
hours
than
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the american
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american
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American
Americans
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.
However
,
brazilian
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Brazilian
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and
turkish
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Turkish
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tourists
enjoying
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most of their
times
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time
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at the beach, in 6 and 5
hours
respectively. All four categories spent
least
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the least
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of their time visiting places. With
chinese
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Chinese
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tourists
spent
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most little of their time as less as 1 hour per day. Followed by
brazilian
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Brazilian
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in 2
hours
.
Finally
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Finally,
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American and Turkish
tourists
,
spending
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spend
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3
hours
of their day visiting places.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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