The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The graph shown above illustrated
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
hours
per day that tourists
from China, America, Turkey, and Brazilian
spent doing leisure activities Replace the word
Brazil
while
on holiday in Greece, in August 2019. The sequence mentioned before was drawn from left to right in the chart. There are 3 activies
explained, at the beach Correct your spelling
activities
colored
blue, reading books Change the spelling
coloured
with
orange, and visiting places pictured in Change preposition
in
gray
.
Reading books Change the spelling
grey
are
the leading leisure Change the verb form
is
activites
done longest by both Chinese and American Correct your spelling
activity
tourists
, although
Correct article usage
the chinese
chinese
spent 8 Change the capitalization
Chinese
hours
, which is 3 more hours
than Correct article usage
the american
american
. Change the capitalization
American
Americans
However
, brazilian
and Change the capitalization
Brazilian
turkish
Change the capitalization
Turkish
tourists
enjoying
most of their Wrong verb form
enjoy
times
at the beach, in 6 and 5 Fix the agreement mistake
time
hours
respectively.
All four categories spent least
of their time visiting places. With Correct article usage
the least
chinese
Change the capitalization
Chinese
tourists
spent
most little of their time as less as 1 hour per day. Followed by Wrong verb form
spend
brazilian
in 2 Change the capitalization
Brazilian
hours
. Finally
American and Turkish Add a comma
Finally,
tourists
, spending
3 Wrong verb form
spend
hours
of their day visiting places.Submitted by aghnia.ulhaq on
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