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The chart below shows the proportion of Energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003

The chart below shows the proportion of Energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003
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The pie charts illustrate the
energy
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 ratio of a
country
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's
resources
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 in 1985 and 2003. Oil was a dominant
energy
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 source in the
country
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 in 1985, whose proportion reached over half. Nuclear power was
also
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 considered a substantial
energy
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 source, having the second largest proportion in the chart, 22%.
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, other significant power
resources
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 existed,
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, natural gas, which held a rate of 13%, and coal, whose portion was 8%. The weight of Hydro and some other renewable
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resources
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 was negligible at that time. Regarding the second diagram, it is evident that the resource structure of the
country
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 has changed in nearly two decades. Only oil maintained its prominent status,
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 its portion has fallen to 39%. Natural gas, whose ratio increased to 23%, has replaced nuclear to become the second most significant resource in the
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,
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 coal took third place with a figure of 22%.
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, nuclear plummeted to 8%, with a shrink of approximately three times.
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, hydro and renewable
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resources
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 continued to make a tiny contribution to
energy
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, which can be neglected during
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 period.
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, oil played an essential role in
energy
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 production at the time. Though the
country
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 has made an effort to change its structure, it continued to use nonrenewable
resources
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 as its primary
energy
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 source. It needed to be made aware of the unignorable potential of renewable
resources
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, country, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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