Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things avoiding change.Others,howevre ,think that change is always a good thing. Discussed both views and give your opinion.
In
this
contemporary era with the economic downfall
most Add a comma
downfall,
of
Change preposition
apply
the
individuals believe that everything happens for a reason, Correct article usage
apply
hence
they tend to live their whole life
doing the same thing without any alterations even without having any kind of life
goals while
others in the community believe that changing the life
pattern would always Change the verb form
result
results
better Add the preposition
results in
results from
life style
full of happiness. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
This
essay will discuss both view points
Correct your spelling
viewpoints
while
highlighting my own opinion.
To begin
with, due to
the current economic situation that prevail
around the world ,most people in the community are afraid of Change the verb form
prevails
changes
and they tend to believe that everything is bound to happen and they should live the way that they have lived so far. And mostly
they are afraid of being subjected to Correct word choice
Mostly
failures
which is Fix the agreement mistake
failure
a
outcome of welcoming new Change the article
an
challenges
and having goals. For
example
we can clearly observe when we visit a town ,Add a comma
example,
they
are some shops which are well developed with time Correct pronoun usage
there
while
some are remain
Change the verb form
remain
same
as in the past. Correct article usage
the same
This
clearly depicts that the shop owners who embraced the challenges
and changes
have developed their business while
other retailors
do not show any progress Correct your spelling
retailers
due to
their unwillingness to alter with the technological advancement. Furthermore
people love to have a peaceful mind without any hindrance or massive amount of stress which leads to Add a comma
Furthermore,
have
an unchanged Change the verb form
having
life
.
On the other hand
,some individuals ,mostly the current generation always in search of new things and new challenges
which they find more joyful, thrilling and exciting and it has lead
them to the top of the ladder. Having goals and achieving them always gives a sense of joy which is always good in many ways. Wrong verb form
led
For
example
children in Add a comma
example,
todayâs
world do not hesitate to quit a job and embrace new Correct your spelling
today's
challenges
like starting their own business, trying some online business platforms and earning money by streaming videos. Even though there are many failures ,young people learn from the failures and build up their life
in their own way without having others interference
.
In conclusion, being a part of the young generation Replace the word
interfere
i
believe that we should always try new things and should try to achieve more and level up the status of Change the capitalization
I
life
without having an aimless traditional life
. Even though avoiding changes
could lead a life
with less stress, it do
not Change the verb form
does
supplied
us with Change the verb form
supply
comfort
that others have, Correct article usage
the comfort
Hence
i
believe that we should always subjected to Change the capitalization
I
changes
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