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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA Sodium 14% 14% Saturated fat 21% 16% 29% 26% 43% 37% Breakfast Dinner Lunch Snacks Added sugar 42% 16% 23% 19% 20

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA Sodium 14% 14% Saturated fat 21% 16% 29% 26% 43% 37% Breakfast Dinner Lunch Snacks Added sugar 42% 16% 23% 19% 20
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The pie charts display the average existence of saturated fats, sodium, and added sugars by percentage in regular four meals eaten by the people in the USA. Looking at the pie chart regarding sodium, the highest proportion is for
dinner
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 at 43%, followed by lunch at 29%.
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 but not least, the lowest proportion goes to both snacks and
breakfast
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 with 14%. Moving towards the saturated fat data,
dinner
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 still holds the highest proportion with 37%. It is followed by lunch at 26% and closely followed by snacks at 21%.
Breakfast
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 yet again is the lowest with just 16%. Closing with
added
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 sugar category, contrary to others, snacks hold
first
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 position with 42%. It is followed by
dinner
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 at 23% and lunch at 19%.
Breakfast
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 remains the lowest amount at a mere 16%.
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,
dinner
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 placed first with an abundance of sodium and saturated fat.
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,
breakfast
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 is the healthiest meal among all of the four meals.

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