The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph elaborates on the percentage of total drivers who got their driving license between 1980 and 2010 divided by gender. The data for women throughout the years shows fluctuating numbers Linking Words
while
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men
's had a stable increase.
The thing that stands out the most is how both women and Use synonyms
men
in 1980 became the least of the population that passed the driving test where the data couldn't surpass 50% of the individuals. More than that, it is Use synonyms
also
obvious to see that females are more likely can drive than Linking Words
men
. Use synonyms
This
is because the topmost number led the Linking Words
overall
graphic in the year 2000 where it was nearly 70% of women could operate cars. Linking Words
However
, there was a slight decline in 2010 that almost made the numbers hit 60%.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
men
started with the lowest number in the Use synonyms
overall
chart with only almost 30% of the population. Linking Words
However
, not like how the females' chart showed a decrease, Linking Words
men
's showed an upward trend for each year until Use synonyms
finally
being tied in the two years. The peak years were in 2000 and 2010 when two of them placed the highest number with nearly 50% of males certified car drivers.Linking Words
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