The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The first diagram
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illustrates the production process and
machineries
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machinery
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producing cement,
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the second one
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shows us
about
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the quantity of cement making concrete for facilities and infrastructures.
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, both processes look difficult and complex because both of them must have many numbers with
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proportions and many materials as well. In the first process, they use two materials called limestone and clay and
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, they put them together into a machine and crush them into powder. After that, they take these to the mixer, go through a tube and come to
rotating
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heater.
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machine will be moved around and
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collapsed
with the heat outside. They will become a purple
mixure
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mixture
and the grinder will husk them. The final product will be grey and it will be put into bags and continued to make concrete. After having the quantity of cements, they just use 15% of them and add water, sand and gravel with some specific proportions respectively 10%, 25% and 50%.
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, they put them into a concrete mixer and
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it
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will be moved 360 degrees.
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, we will have concrete.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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