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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the percentage of British
students
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 in England’s
university
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 who can speak other languages despite English in 2 time periods, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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students
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 who can speak Spanish accounted for the majority in both years. The number of
students
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 who were able to speak additional languages increased in the year 2010.
According to
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 the data,Spanish was the main trend in 2000 with 30% of
students
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 speaking, and still stayed at the top place in 2010. What’s more, the figures for two other languages and German accounted equally for 10% of pupils.
While
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students
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 who can speak more than 1 language rose by 5%, German still remained unchanged. As regards remaining data, pupils who spoke French only accounted for 15% in the year 2000 and decreased to 10% in the next 10 years.
Likewise
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, the number of
students
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 who were not able to speak an additional language witnessed a reduction by half, from 20% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic competence
  • significant
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • popularity
  • relatively
  • decade
  • compare/contrast
  • survey
  • data
  • fluent
  • proficient
  • bilingual
  • predominant
  • minority
  • emerge
  • dwindle
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