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The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of people working in three different
sectore
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sectors
sector
 include manufacturing, Sales and
services
 in
town
 A and
town
 B in 1960
and2010
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and 2010
.
overall
, The maximum was
town
 A in
the
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manufacturing in 1960,
while
 in 2010, the maximum
it
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was in
the
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services
.
By contrast
, in 1960 and 2010, the highest proportion in
town
 B was in industry. In
town
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town,
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 A,
services
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the services
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of
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percentage rose by 45% over the two years to reach 64% in 2010.
wherease
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whereas
, in sale and manufacture were 30% and 40%
respictively
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respectively
 in 1960,
also
 in 2010, these were 16% and 20%
respictively
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respectively
. In
town
 B, there was
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an increased
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increased
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 in sales stood at around 2% and
services
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the services
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 sector stood at 15% in 1960
and2016
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and 2016
.
Another
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On the other
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 hand, manufactures
was
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fall
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fell
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of
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by
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 around 12% over
that
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those
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 two years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words services, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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