The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
this
graph, it
briefly gives us information about the consumption of fast food by teenagers in Australia. Correct pronoun usage
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However
, it only gives us reports in a certain timeline of 1975 to 2000. Prominently, the diagram gives us a glimpse on
the rise of Change preposition
of
Hamburgers
starting to be eaten by teens over the years. In the following paragraph, I will give you an overview on
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of
this
.
Firstly
, we can tell than
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that
fish
and chips
were extremely popular during 1975 by
a whooping consumption of 100 times per year. Change preposition
with
On the other hand
, pizza wasn't much in demand and hamburgers
eaten by children were only getting started back then
. In short, as the sales of fish
and chips
per year decreased from 1975, hamburgers
sold started increasing. The popularity of pizza grew much slower than hamburgers
before the 2000s. Although
,
teenagers Remove the comma
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starting
consuming less Wrong verb form
started
of
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fish
and chips
from
1975, it still had a peak Change preposition
in
at
1985, exactly 10 years after its highest sales in 1975. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, in around 1987, same
numbers of Correct article usage
the same
hamburgers
and fish
and chips
were taken by young ages.
Overall
, you get a view of the introduction of new foods like hamburgers
, which unfortunately declines old fashioned foods like fish
and chips
in the population amongst kids.Submitted by routmanmayee on
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