Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development, however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?
For a long time, economic
development
has played a significant role around the whole world, some people think, want to improvement
the standard of living Replace the word
improve
from
through economic Change preposition
apply
development
. While
,
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apply
another
people believe that social values Replace the adjective
other
lost
Add a missing verb
are lost
as a
result
. This
essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of economic development
.
There are a number of benefits of improve
economic Wrong verb form
improved
development
. First and foremost, with regard to the advantages it is seen that economic development
can to
cause positive in most countries. BecauseFix the infinitive
apply
,
provides the several from remain to Remove the comma
apply
level
high in Add an article
a level
economy
. Add an article
the economy
For example
, standard
of living in Add an article
the standard
Correct article usage
a development
development
economy country is easy. Replace the word
developing
In addition
, economic growth helps improve social value. For instance
, forming economic growth from through society.
To sum up
, because of these factors is clear that there are several benefits of economic development
as a
result
improve
social value.
On the other Wrong verb form
improved
hands
, there are Fix the agreement mistake
hand
also
several disadvantages social
value Change preposition
to social
is
lost Wrong verb form
being
as a
result
in
of Change preposition
apply
economic
Correct article usage
the economic
development
country. To begin
with, because in effect on environment problem. To illustrate, there are impact
from Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
through
air pollution Change preposition
apply
also
from through change climate. As a
result
of these aspects, it is apparent that there are several drawbacks of economic development
as was clearly outlined in this
essay.
In conclusion, it is evident this
essay highlighted on positive impact and negative effect
of economic Fix the agreement mistake
effects
development
in most country
. In my opinion, the advantages greatly outweigh the disadvantages.Fix the agreement mistake
countries
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structure
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development
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examples
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grammar
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vocabulary
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Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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