In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, in the majority of nations, smoking has been banned in public places
such
as parks, gardens, hospitals and restaurants. And it has a strong backbone by the law. In this
essay, I totally agree with this
perspective because it reduces the harmful effects of passive smoking and encourages people
who are addicted to smoking to quit.
On the one hand, the reason that it the illegal to smoke
in open places is because cigarette smoke
can lead people
to develop diseases related to second-hand smoke
. Passive smoking is something that non-smokers cannot avoid when they are in front of a smoker. Thus
, inhaled smoke
can cause innocent people
who do not smoke
suffering
from respiratory diseases Change the verb form
to suffer
such
as lung cancer and asthma. For example
, a decade ago England citizens are
suffered from lung cancer problems but the majority of patients were non-smokers. Unnecessary verb
apply
Therefore
, the UK government enforced the
strong law Correct article usage
a
of
smoking cigarettes. Change preposition
against
Consequently
, there was a significant decline in the above diseases leading many countries to adopt similar measures.
On the other hand
, prohibiting smoking in public areas can cause people
who are addicted to smoke
to give up smoking. Because, when smoking becomes illegal, smokers will encounter discrimination such
as criticism or look down upon by other citizens, so this
is an excellent motivation to quit. For instance
, if they had social pressure about smoking they were given more encouragement to be ex-smokers since they can not tolerate the pressure from the public. Eventually, they can give up the habit and attain a healthier body.
In conclusion, this
essay believes that banning smoke
in public is a rational way to prevent the
Correct article usage
apply
non smokers
inhale accidentally and can favourably avoid Add a hyphen
non-smokers
smoke
in open places. And also
can encourage
the smoker Wrong verb form
encourages
away
from cigarettes.Change preposition
to away
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Grammar
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