In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, in the majority of nations, smoking has been banned in public places
such
as parks, gardens, hospitals and restaurants. And it has a strong backbone by the law. In
this
essay, I totally agree with
this
perspective because it reduces the harmful effects of passive smoking and encourages
people
who are addicted to smoking to quit. On the one hand, the reason that it the illegal to
smoke
in open places is because cigarette
smoke
can lead
people
to develop diseases related to second-hand
smoke
. Passive smoking is something that non-smokers cannot avoid when they are in front of a smoker.
Thus
, inhaled
smoke
can cause innocent
people
who do not
smoke
suffering
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from respiratory diseases
such
as lung cancer and asthma.
For example
, a decade ago England citizens
are
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suffered from lung cancer problems but the majority of patients were non-smokers.
Therefore
, the UK government enforced
the
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strong law
of
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against
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smoking cigarettes.
Consequently
, there was a significant decline in the above diseases leading many countries to adopt similar measures.
On the other hand
, prohibiting smoking in public areas can cause
people
who are addicted to
smoke
to give up smoking. Because, when smoking becomes illegal, smokers will encounter discrimination
such
as criticism or look down upon by other citizens, so
this
is an excellent motivation to quit.
For instance
, if they had social pressure about smoking they were given more encouragement to be ex-smokers since they can not tolerate the pressure from the public. Eventually, they can give up the habit and attain a healthier body. In conclusion,
this
essay believes that banning
smoke
in public is a rational way to prevent
the
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non smokers
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inhale accidentally and can favourably avoid
smoke
in open places. And
also
can encourage
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the smoker
away
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to away
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from cigarettes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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