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The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.

The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.
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The line chart illustrates the comparisons of the amount of daily spending on
Business
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, Holidays or vacations, and visiting friends or relatives during the period between 1997 and 2017 in New
Zealand
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. In general, all categories fluctuated numbers in average daily spending in New
Zealand
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 year by year.
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, the highest value of daily consumption by visitors was
Business
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 but in the end, the highest was replaced by vacation. Regarding the visitors in New
Zealand
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 who had spent money in two decades, it was clear that the
business
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 categories had a sharp increase in 2000
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 when the number reached 320
dollars
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.
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, the gap between
Business
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 and visiting friends or relatives had dropped to 10
dollars
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 in 2004.
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spending money by visitors in New
Zealand
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 for
Business
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 only reached 210
dollars
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. In terms of the other high income from New
Zealand
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, we can see the Holiday or vacation significantly increased from 195
dollars
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 to 270
dollars
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 during the period 1997 to 2004.
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, the range of numbers between Holiday-Relatives and Holiday-
Business
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 fluctuated over two decades, which were starting points of 80
dollars
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 and 60
dollars
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.
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, in the first decade reached 70
dollars
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 and 10
dollars
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.
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, in 2017, the differences in spending money reached approximately 100% and 50% from the past decade
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words business, zealand, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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