The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
The two
pie
charts illustrate some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
It is obvious that women prefer jobs
that do not involve physical labor
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labour
than
men’s Change preposition
to
job
, but that’s not always the case. The figures Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
of
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in
this
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these
pie
charts are similar to each other.
For
example
the vast majority of those parties prefer Add a comma
example,
the
manual Correct article usage
apply
jobs
. Furthermore
, only six percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
male
in the Fix the agreement mistake
males
pie
chart prefer clerical or related work, whereas
the
31 Correct article usage
apply
percent
of female employees prefer these Change the spelling
per cent
jobs
. Men are good
at crafts or similar Correct word choice
better
jobs
than women. Also
, 36% of male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
twenty nine
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twenty-nine
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
female
in Fix the agreement mistake
females
pie
charts prefer managerial and professional Correct article usage
the pie
jobs
.
In the
conclusion, the two Correct article usage
apply
pie
chats
Correct your spelling
charts
shows
that female and male employees have the same percentage of manual and non-manual Change the verb form
show
works
.Fix the agreement mistake
work
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