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Playing team sports can teach students more than just the games themselves. What do young people learn from playing team games? How are they useful in their later life?

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Playing team sports have more useful benefits for children that can assist them in future. It not only develops their physicals but
also
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 up some good
qualitites
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qualities
 for those and these benefits will contribute to
inform
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 the value of a person. That’s why it plays an important role in their lives.
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 joining some playing team sports, those children will
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 more soft skills and improve their communication and
gesture
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 when working
together with
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 their teams.
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, they
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 develop their
problem solving
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 skills and demonstrate their
creativities
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. By participating in many
sport
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 games, the kids will upgrade their
healths
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 and have a comprehensive development about their physicals.
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 not only brings some benefits about their grow-up but
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 practices for them about the good
qualitites
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qualities
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 as patience, confidence and empathy. When taking part in many competitions
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the
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 young age, they find it easy to face challenges by putting experiences into reality. Some skills which they had learnt before will help them overcome difficult missions. By
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 I mean,
when
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that when
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 they interact with an older or
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younger than them, they still know ways to respect their partners and behave with them. The young people will have more experiences after
challenging
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 and they
also
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 have some useful lessons that assist them in their
career
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 in future. In conclusion, every child should spend their time
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playing team sports in order to not only enhance their
healths
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 but
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 build up
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responsibility
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 spirit for every individual.
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