The graphs below show the average daily hours of sunshine and the average monly temperature in Darwin and Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graphs below show the average daily hours of sunshine and the average monly temperature in Darwin and Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The table shows how
men
and
women
who were out of work
last
year spent their time. The information is broken down into parts of the day and fourteen different
activities
. First of all, it is interesting to note that the majority of both
men
and
women
who are unemployed are engaged in productive
activities
in the morning with 61% of
men
and 91% of
women
either shopping, trying to secure employment or doing housework, with
women
being twice as likely to do the latter in the afternoon.
However
, figures for the afternoon show that the unemployed devote more time to leisure
activities
such
as watching television, visiting friends or reading. When looking at differences between genders it seems that
men
were more likely to be engaged
with
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in
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home improvement, gardening or active pursuits
such
as walking or taking part in sports. More sedentary
activities
such
as staying in bed or sitting around were similar for both sexes. Twice the number of
men
than
women
spent their time drinking but
this
still only accounted for a very small proportion.
Overall
, it appears that contrary to many stereotypical preconceptions of the unemployed both
men
and
women
do spend a proportion of each day on productive tasks with
their
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there
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being some interesting differences between genders.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, activities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily sunlight
  • average monthly temperature
  • comparison
  • seasonal variations
  • geographical location
  • tropical climate
  • temperate climate
  • weather patterns
  • Darwin
  • Melbourne
  • temperature fluctuations
  • maximum temperatures
  • minimum temperatures
  • sunlight hours
  • degree Celsius
  • bar chart
  • line graph
  • to fluctuate
  • peak sunlight/temperature
  • troughs in temperature
  • overcast days
  • climatic conditions
  • thermal range
  • extremes of weather
  • meteorological data
  • data interpretation
  • data summary
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