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the diagrams below show the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy

the diagrams below show the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy
#diagrams #show #life #cycle #lady #bird #anatomy
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All animals have their own
cycle
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. The diagrams show the
life
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cycle
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 and body
parts
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 of a
ladybug
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. It has four main stages in its
life
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cycle
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, beginning as an egg and ending as an adult. Anatomy comprises eight main
parts
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. The
ladybug
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's
life
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cycle
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 begins when the mother lays eggs on leaves. The egg stage lasts for two to five days, and it grows
to
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 a larva, which stays in
this
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 stage for 21 days. From the larva, a pupa is formed, lasting seven days before maturing into an adult
ladybug
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. The anatomy of a
ladybug
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 consists of eight main body
parts
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. The head features two antennas, a pair of eyes, and a protonum. The adult
ladybug
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's body is covered with red elytra and black spots, with wings and the abdomen underneath. It has six legs, three on each side. It can be concluded that a
ladybug
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's
life
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cycle
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 consists of four stages, and its anatomy comprises eight main
parts
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