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ACADEMIC TASK 2 The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales ( in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. WRITE AT LEAST 150 WORDS

ACADEMIC TASK 2 The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales ( in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. WRITE AT LEAST 150 WORDS
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The
number
 of
rentals
 and
sales
 of films from a particular store between 2022 and 2011 are shown in the bar chart.
Overall
, people
tend
Correct pronoun usage
who tend
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 to
rental
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rent
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 a film and buy a VHS was decreasing
in
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apply
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each year and
step-by-step
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step by step
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 they move to choose a film with DVD, or Blu-ray format. In
details
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detail
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, the DVD
sales
was
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were
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 the most stable in
a
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apply
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number
. It
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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also
hitted
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hit
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 the highest
number
 of
sales
 in between 2002-2011. The second
number
 is followed by
rentals
although
 the
decrease
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a decrease
show examples
of
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in
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 its
number
in
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apply
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each year. The second highlight is the rise of Blu-ray
sales
 and the decrease of VHS
salses
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sales
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. In 2006, both
are having
Wrong verb form
had
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 no
number
 of
its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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sales
. The blu-ray
sales
are
Verb problem
have
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 always increasing since 2007.
In
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On
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 the other side
the
Correct article usage
apply
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VHS
sales
 are nothing between 2006-2011. In conclusion, the highest
number
 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
report
Fix the agreement mistake
reports
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 of
rentals
 and
sales
 of
films
Fix the agreement mistake
film
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 preference
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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rentals
 and
dvd
Correct your spelling
DVD
sales
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, rentals, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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