The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given figure demonstrates how cutting tools developed in the Stone era. As shown
above
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there were two tools and two different periods.
Firstly
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,
tool
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A which was before 1.4
milion
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million
years ago, illustrates thick and dark.
Moreover
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, the texture was tough.
Front
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side
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is thin and has a lot of curving.
Whereas
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backside
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the backside
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was less curved than the opposite
side
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.
While
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the sides of the stone
was
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were
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thiner and almost no curving with sharp
tip
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tips
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.
Secondly
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,
tool
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B was before 0.8
milion
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million
years
.
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ago.
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In
ablition
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addition
to that, it was much
developed
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more developed
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than
tool
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A. As represented above
that
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apply
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tool
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B is thinner and smoother.
Front
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The front
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side
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became wider and soft with no curves.
However
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,
back
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the back
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side
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was with sharp curves.
Side
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view
,
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developed more to thinner and
sharpor
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sharper
tip.
Finally
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,
tool
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B developed
to
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into
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sharper
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a sharper
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cutting
tool
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and
more
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was more
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effective, much better than
tool
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A which was thick and more curved.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tool, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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