The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given figure demonstrates how cutting tools developed in the Stone era. As shown
above
there were two tools and two different periods.
Add a comma
above,
Firstly
, Linking Words
tool
A which was before 1.4 Use synonyms
milion
years ago, illustrates thick and dark. Correct your spelling
million
Moreover
, the texture was tough. Linking Words
Front
Add an article
The front
side
is thin and has a lot of curving. Use synonyms
Whereas
Linking Words
backside
was less curved than the opposite Correct article usage
the backside
side
. Use synonyms
While
the sides of the stone Linking Words
was
thiner and almost no curving with sharp Change the verb form
were
tip
.
Fix the agreement mistake
tips
Secondly
, Linking Words
tool
B was before 0.8 Use synonyms
milion
yearsCorrect your spelling
million
.
In Rephrase
ago.
ablition
to that, it was much Correct your spelling
addition
developed
than Correct quantifier usage
more developed
tool
A. As represented above Use synonyms
that
Correct determiner usage
apply
tool
B is thinner and smoother. Use synonyms
Front
Correct article usage
The front
side
became wider and soft with no curves. Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
back
Add an article
the back
side
was with sharp curves. Use synonyms
Side
viewUse synonyms
,
developed more to thinner and Remove the comma
apply
sharpor
tip.
Correct your spelling
sharper
Finally
, Linking Words
tool
B developed Use synonyms
to
Change preposition
into
sharper
cutting Correct article usage
a sharper
tool
and Use synonyms
more
effective, much better than Add a missing verb
was more
tool
A which was thick and more curved.Use synonyms
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tool, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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