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The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts describe the proportion of some
nutrients
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, namely
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added sugar, in
breakfast
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,
dinner
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, lunch, and
snacks
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 in the USA. Data are presented in percentages.
Overall
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,
dinner
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 and
snacks
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 contribute the highest percentage of
nutrients
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 in total.
Additionally
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, the smallest amount of each nutrient is consumed during
breakfast
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. First of all,
although
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 there is only a small amount of
sodium
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 at 14%, saturated fat in
snacks
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 is
two-third
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two-thirds
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 the number. Even worse, it produces added sugar three times the proportion of
sodium
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.
In contrast
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,
dinner
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 consists of approximately half of
sodium
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 and a third of saturated fat. Meanwhile, the added sugar in
dinner
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 is only 23%. Totally,
snacks
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 and
dinner
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 give the largest
nutrients
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.
On the other hand
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,
breakfast
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 and lunch supply the least
nutrients
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.
Firstly
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,
breakfast
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 only produces the least number of
nutrients
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, at almost 15% for each nutrient.
Furthermore
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, lunch contributes to a range of 20% to 30% of each nutrient.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, sodium, breakfast, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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