The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Japan’s population: past, present and future trends.

The chart and  table below give information about population figures in Japan.

Japan’s population: past, present and future trends.
The chart compares the data about
Japanese
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population (measured in millions) from 1950 to 2055.
Overall
, the most populated year was 2005,
whereas
the least amount of people lived at the start of the period.
Additionally
, the number of people who are older than 65
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increasing
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the years.
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only 84.1 of Japanese citizens lived in the country, increasing to 104.6 in 1970. After that, it was a great leap to 111,9, consistently growing to 126.9 in 2000. In 2005, 127.8 of Japanese resided in Japan, accounting for the lowest figure in the chart.
On the other hand
, in 2035, the percentage had dramatically declined to 1.10, and
then
even
further
to 89.9 by the end of the period. Even though, only 4.9% of
total
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the total
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population were elders (aged 65 and older) living in Japan in 1950,
this
number significantly rose to 41.0% in 2055.
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