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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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These bar charts depict the comparison between graduate and postgraduate
students
about
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apply
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full-time working after finishing college in 2008 in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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. It is clear from the graph that the category of
further
 study
took
Verb problem
had
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that
Correct determiner usage
the
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 highest number of
students
 for both two types in 2008.
According to
 what is shown, the number of
students
 who did
further
 study
were
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was
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 more than those
they
Correct pronoun usage
who
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 had part-time
work
 approximately 11930
students
,
while
the
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apply
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voluntary
work
 was the lowest one taken by the
students
 about 3500 graduated
students
 during
year
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the year
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 2008 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom. As for
postgraduated
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postgraduate
students
, the gap between
furthermore
 study and part-time
work
 was no much, where the difference
were
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was
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nereast
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nearest
 to 190
students
 only and the share of voluntary
work
 was 345
on
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in
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 that year in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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.
To sum up
, we could say that the number of graduated
students
overall
 for all categories are much more than the
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number of postgraduated
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postgraduated
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postgraduate
post graduated
students
on
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in
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 the same year in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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