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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The illustration below shows some variations of the percentage of
people
 who were conceived in
Australia
 and who were born in foreign countries staying in urban, rural and
towns
betwwen
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between
 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, in 1995 most
people
 born in
Australia
 were living in cities
while
 the least citizens born outside
Australia
 were
stayin
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staying
stayin'
 in
towns
. In 2010,
moreover
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moreover,
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 many
people
 both conceived in
Australia
 and
outsite
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outside
Astralia
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Australia
 were having their
accomodation
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accommodation
 in Cities. Between 1995 and 2010, the number of
people
 born outside
Australia
 staying in cities was the same. Individuals born in
Australia
staying
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stayed
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 in rural
areas
 in 1995
where
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were
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 roughly 15% well over those in 2010 who were
also
 living in
ruaral
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rural
areas
. The number of
people
 born in
Australia
 staying in
towns
 in 1995 was double that of those in 2010. Citizens born in
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Australia
Autsralia
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Australia
 in 2010 staying in
towns
 and rural
areas
was
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were
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 the same
where as
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whereas
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those
thos
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those
 that were born in
Australia
 in the same year staying in rural
areas
 were about 5% half of
people
 living in
towns
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, towns, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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