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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant
The two bar charts illustrate the UK
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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' future decisions after leaving college in 2008, their choices were distributed by 4 conditions - being a part-time worker, voluntary worker, unemployment and going to
further
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 study. Those who started full-time
work
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 did not participate in the data collection.
Overall
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, the trends of the two groups are quite similar, most of the
students
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 in both groups wanted to continue studying and the minority of
students
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 chose to become voluntary workers.
However
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, the sizes of the two groups are rather different, the
number
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 of
students
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 who were
graduates
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 is far more than the
students
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 who were
postgraduates
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.
It is clear that
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 the majority of
graduates
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, almost 30000 of them, greatly outnumbered their counterparts who ended up in the other three situations.
In contrast
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, only 3500
graduates
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 engaged in voluntary
work
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, making it the least common post-graduation destination.
Moreover
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, those who worked part-time and were unemployed were nearly the same in
number
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, at 17,735 and 1,6235 respectively, which were a little higher than the double of
further
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 study. Looking into the information for more details, the
number
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 of post-graduate
students
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 in each classification was nearly one-tenth of the
number
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 of
graduates
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, except for people going on to
work
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 part-time. There were 2,535
postgraduates
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 who started to
work
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 as part-time workers.
While
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 around 3000
postgraduates
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 continued being
students
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, the group of voluntary workers were still the smallest with 345 people and 1,625
postgraduates
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 were unemployed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, postgraduates, work, students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time work
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • trends
  • part-time work
  • further study
  • gap year
  • traveling
  • unemployment
  • percentages
  • proportion
  • significant differences
  • subsequent activities
  • career progression
  • academic advancement
  • job market
  • vocational training
  • data interpretation
  • employment sector
  • career-oriented steps
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