A number of married
woman
in several countries decide to delay their pregnancy because many think that to have a baby, parents must be mentally and financially ready. In my opinion, Change to a plural noun
women
this
approach will help us create a better Linking Words
generation
in the next twenty or thirty years. Use synonyms
This
essay will shed some light on the issue and the writer's point of view.
No one is Linking Words
a
strange Change the article
apply
to
the fact that Change preposition
by
in
these days, tuition Change preposition
apply
cost
an arm and a leg, especially in international school which has become everyone's dream Wrong verb form
costs
campuss
for their children. To illustrate Correct your spelling
campus
campuses
this
, parents must pay around 100 billion every month so that their Linking Words
kid
can study in a profound elementary school in Jakarta. Fix the agreement mistake
kids
Besides
the financial things, mental Linking Words
issue
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issues
has
always been a consideration for individuals to have a baby late in life. Correct subject-verb agreement
have
This
is illustrated well by the fact that many Linking Words
has
been through a hard life Change the verb form
have
as a consequence
of divorced parents. Linking Words
Thus
, they do not want their offspring to have the same trauma as what they had experienced.
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Therefore
, having a baby when one is fully ready Linking Words
have
a lot of advantages. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Firstly
, a child who Linking Words
raised
by someone who really knows how to nurture Add a missing verb
is raised
a kids
will very likely grow to be a great person. To Correct the article-noun agreement
kids
a kid
examplify
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exemplify
this
, since Linking Words
younger
Correct article usage
the younger
generation
tends to look up to their mom or dad, when a mother or a father always Use synonyms
show
them love, Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
then
their children will definitely become a lovable Linking Words
person
in the future. Fix the agreement mistake
people
Secondly
, someone who lives in Linking Words
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a wealth
wealth
family Replace the word
wealthy
have
a higher chance to access a better education Change the verb form
has
as well as
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high-nutrition
meal which Add an article
a high-nutrition
lead
them to be a smarter and healthier Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
generation
.
In conclusion, the living cost in nowadays era and the mental issue might be the case why some people do not want kids shortly after their marriage. But, Use synonyms
on the other hand
, Linking Words
this
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phenomena
can lead to a brighter and healthier Fix the agreement mistake
phenomenon
generation
in the future.Use synonyms
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