The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned 

future development of the site.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.
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The two maps show the changes before and after the development of
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Norbition
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the Norbition
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industry
area
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.
It is clear that
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the purpose is to turn the
Norbition
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industry
area
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into a residential
area
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that provides a complete living resource.  The first map reveals the current situation of
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Norbition
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the Norbition
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industry
area
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which is completely occupied by factories without any living
area
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in it. 
However
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, after development, as shown in the second map, all factories will be torn down and replaced with
housings
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housing
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and facilities that
needed
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are needed
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for daily life,
such
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as
school
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schools
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,
hospital
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hospitals
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, shops, etc. Meanwhile, the roadways
also
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become more accessible in all directions
by
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of
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the layout of the buildings. To the north of the
factory
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factory,
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there is a river running through the entire
Norbition
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industrial
area
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. On the other side of the river, there is
a
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apply
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farmland
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.
According to
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the plan, a bridge will be built to connect the two sides of the river in the future, and the residential
area
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will take the convenience and reach
to
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the other side. By
then
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the
farmland
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can coexist with the residential
area
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.
Although
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the
area
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of
farmland
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has shrunk, without the pollution from factories, the
farmland
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will be better developed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words norbition, area, farmland with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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