The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The chart demonstrates the figures, categorized into five age groups, related to the percentage of Australians exercising regularly for both genders in 2010.
Overall
, women had done more frequent activities
than men, except for the girls aged 15-24.
Middle-aged Australian females seem to have done more exercise in their thirties to fifties, by and large, roughly around 50% in total. The youngsters (between 25 to 34) did fewer activities
in comparison to the elders between 35-64. This
means that physical activities
had grown in popularity as Australians got older, increasing from 47.7% to 53% until 64. On the other hand
, the number of physical activity was reduced by roughly 6% to 46.7 among older people over 65 years old.
In the case of males, the tendency towards doing such
activities
had considerably reduced over time from adolescence to 44 (the figures dropped from 52.8% to 39.5). The trend, however
, reversed and as people got older they tended to be more active and increased by virtually 7%.
To conclude
, the inclination towards physical activities
between men and women is negatively correlated with each other, but on the whole, young people seem to have worked out more than any stages of life in both genders.Submitted by Haniehfathi98 on
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