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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of people in
India
 and
China
 from 2000 to the current year with
forecasting
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a forecasting
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 to 2050.
Overall
,
China
 had a
lesser
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smaller
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population
 in 2000 compared to
India
, but it is predicted to have
more
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a higher
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population
 than
India
 after 2030.
India
 showed an upward trend from 2000 to the current year, it is later predicted to have a decreased
population
 after 2030.
In contrast
,
China
's
population
 had a stable
grow
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growth
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 from 2000 to
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the recent
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recent
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present
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. It is
also
 projected to continue growing gradually until 2050.
India
 started off with 1,250
billions
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billion
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of
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people in 2000. It is forecast to reach a peak of over 1,400
billions
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billion
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 of
population
 between 2025 and 2030, before dropping progressively to below 1,400
billions
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billion
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 in 2050.
On the other hand
,
China
 began with 1,000
population
 in 2000. The
population
grow
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has grown
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 steadily up to recent
year
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years
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. It is projected to climb consistently in the following years and hit a high of 1,600
billions
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billion
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 of
population
 in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, population, billions with synonyms.
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