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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkwort and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkwort and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first diagram shows that there are four main stages in the life of the silkworm and the second diagram illustrates the process by which
silk
cloths
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cloth
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 is produced.
Overall
, the diagrams show that
cocoon
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the cocoon
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 stage of the silkworm can used to produce
silk
 cloth through a very simple
approchs
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approach
approaches
. First of all, eggs are produced by the moth and it takes ten days for each egg to become a silkworm larva, the larva
are
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is
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feed
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fed
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 by mulberry leaf.
This
 stage takes around four to six weeks
then
 it
became
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becomes
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silk
 thread
then
 the
silk
left
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leaves
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 the cocoon
became
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becomes
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 a adult moth and the life cycle begins
agains
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again
against
. The cocoons are the raw
meterial
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material
 to
product
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produce
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silk
 cloth.
Initially
, collected the quality cocoons.
Then
 put them into the boiled water tail they became soft. And the thread can
spreaded
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spread
 ranging from 300-900
meter
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meters
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.
After
this
, which means we can
twisted
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twist
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 together, dyed and
then
 used to produce cloth in the weaving stage.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words silk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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