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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the proportion of the population owning
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computer
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computers
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 from 2002 to 2010, and based on the level of
education
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 from 2002 to 2010. In 2002, the
computer
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ownership
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 was below 60%. It gradually increased over the years and peaked at approximately 70% in 2010. For
computer
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ownership
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 by
education
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 level, all
education
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 levels have a higher
percentage
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 of
computers
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computer
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ownership
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 in 2010, as compared to 2002. The highest
percentage
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 of
computer
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owneship
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ownership
 was
postgraduate
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a postgraduate
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 qualification. It stood at approximately 75% in 2002 and hiked to almost 100% in 2010. It followed by
bachelor's
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a bachelor's
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 degree which had a record of 70% in 2002 and
subsequently
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 grew to 90% in 2010. The third place was college where the data showed
computer
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ownership
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 of 50% in 2002. In 2010, the
percentage
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then
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 again increased to close to 90%. The category that came with
least
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percentage
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 was the population who did not have a high school diploma. It started at 15% in 2002 and rose to 40% in 2010.
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, the
percentage
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 of
computer
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ownership
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 has shown a steady increase over the years.
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, the
percentage
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 of
computer
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ownership
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 increased at all
education
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level
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levels
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 from 2002 to 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, education, ownership, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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