The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second cahrt shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second cahrt shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the average data collected from Australian households. The first pie chart displays the proportion of
energy
usage by different appliances,
while
the second chart shows the
greenhouse
gas
emissions
which come from
energy
consumption.
Overall
,
although
heating and water heating contribute the majority percentage of
energy
usage in households, most
greenhouse
gas
emissions
result from water heating and other appliances. It is obvious that heating is good at reducing the total
emissions
of
greenhouse
gases, because it exploits 42% of the total
energy
,
while
it only generates nearly one-third of the complete
emissions
, which are 15%.
In contrast
, no matter the data in the graph of
energy
usage or
greenhouse
gas
discharges, water heating accounts for quite the same percentage in both charts, which is around 30%. (In the emission part the exact data is 32%) Looking at the information for more details, there is 28% of the whole
emissions
consist of the classification which is titled other appliances, meanwhile,
this
is the second majority factor of household
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
Additionally
, the proportion of refrigeration and lighting, which are in the diagram of the utilization of power, both double their own percentage in
energy
use, with 7% and 14% and 4% and 8% respectively. For the remaining appliance - the cooling, it does not have a big difference, which uses 2% of
energy
and produces 3% of total
greenhouse
emissions
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