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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The picture illustrates the
development
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 of
Chorleywood
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, a
village
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 near London which had significant population growth from 1868 to 1994.
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, the
development
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 of
Chorleywood
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Village
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 was more focused on transportation infrastructures
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 as main roads, motorways, and railways.
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 that, there are more neighbourhoods during the
development
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 process. The
Chorleywood
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development
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 was classified into four eras, 1868-1883, 1883-1922, 1922-1970, and 1970-1994. In 1868,
Chorleywood
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 was just a small
village
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 until the
development
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 of the station happened during 1883-1922. Because of
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 railway, the number of residential areas was expanded to the south. After the station was built, from 1992 to 1970, the main road was constructed and had an impact on the residential
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 in
Chorleywood
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village
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. The residential
area
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 expands to the west and east
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area
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 near the station.
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, the huge
development
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 of
Chorleywood
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village
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 happened in 1970-1994 when the motor railway was constructed. The motor railway is
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 connected
with
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 the main road. Because of
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 access, many people from that
village
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 made the new housing complex in north northwest and southwest
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area
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 of
Chorleywood
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words development, chorleywood, village, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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