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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The picture illustrates the
development
 of
Chorleywood
, a
village
 near London which had significant population growth from 1868 to 1994.
Overall
, the
development
 of
Chorleywood
Village
 was more focused on transportation infrastructures
such
 as main roads, motorways, and railways.
Besides
 that, there are more neighbourhoods during the
development
 process. The
Chorleywood
development
 was classified into four eras, 1868-1883, 1883-1922, 1922-1970, and 1970-1994. In 1868,
Chorleywood
 was just a small
village
 until the
development
 of the station happened during 1883-1922. Because of
this
 railway, the number of residential areas was expanded to the south. After the station was built, from 1992 to 1970, the main road was constructed and had an impact on the residential
area
 in
Chorleywood
village
. The residential
area
 expands to the west and east
area
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 near the station.
Furthermore
, the huge
development
 of
Chorleywood
village
 happened in 1970-1994 when the motor railway was constructed. The motor railway is
also
 connected
with
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to
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 the main road. Because of
this
 access, many people from that
village
 made the new housing complex in north northwest and southwest
area
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areas
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 of
Chorleywood
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words development, chorleywood, village, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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