Completing university is the best way to get a job. while others believe that experience and developing soft skills is more important. discuss both views and give your opinion
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requires
education
and Use synonyms
practices
. Fix the agreement mistake
practice
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education
or after practical knowledge of Use synonyms
handful
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a handful
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skills
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of skills
such
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skills
are more important because they are taught at Use synonyms
anyplace
. In the upcoming Correct your spelling
any place
paragraphs
I will elaborate Add a comma
paragraphs,
these
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on these
further
.
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college
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a college
education
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provide
youngsters Change the verb form
provides
the
training Add the preposition
with the
of
subjects which are necessary to search a employment and work. Change preposition
in
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few
topics like mathematics and marketing enhanced their tutoring to get Correct article usage
a few
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a master
master
in these subjects. Before entering into office they gain their knowledge which results Change noun form
master's
into
less struggle during office hours. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, till Linking Words
the
higher studies young Correct article usage
apply
people
can be mature enough to handle Use synonyms
the
business disturbance and the work holic life. They can handle Correct article usage
apply
without
the assistance of parents. Correct pronoun usage
it without
Hence
, they will be less dependent on others for their tasks owing to the coaching they have.
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On the contrary
, some Linking Words
people
are born with good teamwork, interpersonal, and communication Use synonyms
skills
. They do not need to get any studies to start a business. Use synonyms
For example
, Linking Words
owner
of the TATA Correct article usage
the owner
groups
of companies started his career after passing secondary Fix the agreement mistake
group
education
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Therefore
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people
believe that they need Use synonyms
motivation
to achieve success Change the article
the motivation
not
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, not
the
credentials. Correct article usage
apply
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, as Linking Words
the
time passes learning behaviour is enhanced Correct article usage
apply
on
a higher extent. Kids of these days develop Change preposition
to
skills
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at
their own Change preposition
on
due to
the learning ability they have. To illustrate, from a study it is seen that they are doing much better Linking Words
on
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in
work place
as compared to the citizens who have degrees.
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workplace
To conclude
, finding a job is essential for everyone. But should it be after attaining Linking Words
university
degree or after practical knowledgeCorrect article usage
a university
.
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?
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, after an Linking Words
analysis
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analysis,
it is clear that
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people
can Use synonyms
get
more success if they know how to survive in Verb problem
achieve
business
world with Add an article
the business
good
command Correct article usage
a good
in
soft Change preposition
of
skills
because with practice they can learn about topics but not about Use synonyms
skills
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