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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#minutes #sir #madam
Dear
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, My name is Parth Patel and I am working in
computer
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operator
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company
. I am writing
to
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apply
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this
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inform
infrom
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inform
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to
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that
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 there are some
bed
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bad
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activities
activies
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activities
 created some employ in your
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company
. I joined your
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company
compani
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company
in
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on
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 July 15th and I am working in
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a computer
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oparater
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operator
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last
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weeks there
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weekes
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weeks
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are
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have been
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 some
problem
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problems
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to
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for
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 me and some other workers like
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a computer
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 not working
proprly
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properly
, some bed person
interfere
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interferes
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workes
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workers
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 and most Important our manager do not
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listen
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 are old and I told
many
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them many
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time
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times
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 to
manager
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the manager
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 and they do not
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listen
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behavior
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behaviour
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very
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is very
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bed
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bad
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 and they
used
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use
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 bad language. Some bad
peolpe
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people
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in
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into
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 our office and they
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our
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works
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 and our
workes
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are
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 pending and
i
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I
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 do not
sumbit
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submit
works
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work
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timeto
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apply
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time. I hope you
chenge
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change
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computer
 and you stop some
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bad
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activites
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 and support our
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workers
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 as soon as possible. Your Faithfully, Parth Patel.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to organize your letter with clear paragraphs, each covering a single point or idea, to improve the logical flow and readability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on correcting spelling and grammar errors to enhance the clarity of your message. Consider using spell-check tools or asking a friend to proofread your letter.
Task Achievement
Stick to a more formal tone throughout your letter, using appropriate polite expressions and language suited for a formal letter.
Task Achievement
Address all the points specified in the task clearly and concisely to ensure your letter fulfills the purpose of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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