The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the data activities of UK
graduates
and postgraduates after finishing their studies in the year 2008. The units were measured in number of persons and the type of destination was divided into part-time work
, voluntary work
, further
study, and unemployment.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that further
study has the biggest number of students in both graduates
and postgraduates. Meanwhile, voluntary work
was less popular compared with other destinations.
As the bar graph shows, the UK
Correct quantifier usage
number of UK
graduates
who choose
to take a Wrong verb form
chose
further
study was the highest accounted
for 29,665 . The same trend Wrong verb form
accounting
also
occurred for the UK postgraduates, constituting 2,725. In the
second position was to be Change preposition
The
part-time
worker, at 17,735 for Correct article usage
a part-time
graduates
and at 2,535 for post-graduates
.
Regarding the other two destinations, unemployment was in the third position. The figure for graduates
at 16,235 and a-tenth of graduates
for post-graduates
. Lastly
, voluntary work
contributes only to 3,500 and 345, for graduates
and post-graduates
, respectively.Submitted by 2024successielts on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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