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Topic: The given graph shows the past and projected figures of the government spending as a percentage of GDP for the years 2000 to 2025 in three areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Topic: The given graph shows the past and projected figures of the government spending as a percentage of GDP for the years 2000 to 2025 in three areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph delineates the past figures of the government
expendicture
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expenditure
 from 2000 and its prediction in 2025 within three areas. By and large, the percentage of GDP spending on “roads and railways” will decrease
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education will go up.
Initially
, the percentage disbursing of GDP on “education” was exactly 4%, in 2000, and it started to
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 significantly until reaching around 5.50% in 2005.
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, after
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 there was a gradual
raise
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 and it is forecasted to reach a peak of above 7.00% in 2025.
Nonetheless
, the percentage of spending on “reads and railways” witnessed a decline at the beginning of the period which in 2000 was 5.00% and experienced a gradual decrease until 2020 at 4.00% and in 2025, it is predicted
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 will decline below 4.00%.
Similarly
, the proportion of expenses on “health” having
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 same started prevalent as “education”, in the first year of
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 given, was at 4.00% and it rose considerably until picking at around 4.50%.
However
, the movement fluctuated until 2020 and it
ihas
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has
 been projected that will decline at around 3.20% in 2025.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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