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The diagram shows the relationship between a numbers of different languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the relationship between a numbers of different languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagram demonstrates the relationship of the different
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language
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 on a different continent.
Overall
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,
two
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 types of
English
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language
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, the American
English
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branch
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 and the British
English
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branch
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. It is spoken in different
countries
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 and
that
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those
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countries
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also
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 speak other languages. For the American
English
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branch
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, the majority of
this
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language
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spoken
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is spoken
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 in
two
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countries
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, the USA and
Canada
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.
Canada
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 has
two
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 branches that
divided
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are divided
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 by area, Anglophone
Canada
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 and francophone
Canada
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. We can clearly see six branches in the USA;
USA
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the USA
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 region is American Samoa,
west
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 coast southern, midwest,
north east
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northeast
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 coast, Puerto Rico and the
last
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 one is the Philippines. For the British
English
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branch
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, six different
countries
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 have
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west indies
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West Indies
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, Britishness,
Africa
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, India-Pakistan, Australia and
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the far
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far east
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Far East
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. Jamaica and Barbados are
two
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 regions for the
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west indies
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West Indies
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,
whereas
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west
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West
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Africa
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, east
Africa
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 and Angelo phone
Africa
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is
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are
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 for
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Africa
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African
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 territory. In Britishness, four languages
Irish
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are Irish
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,
English
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, Welsh and Scottish,
while
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 the form
of
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apply
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Indian
English
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spoken
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is spoken
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 in
Indian-Pakistan
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India
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. In Australasia, the territory is
speaking
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spoken
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 in
two
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countries
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 Australia and New Zealand.
However
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, the far east side
Malay
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of Malay
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 and
the
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apply
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Chinese
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language
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languages
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spoken
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are spoken
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, two, english, branch, countries, canada, west, africa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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