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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows the relationship between a numbers of different languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows the relationship between a numbers of different languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The provided diagram demonstrates the relationship of the different
language
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languages
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 on a different continent.
Overall
,
two
 types of
English
language
, the American
English
branch
 and the British
English
branch
. It is spoken in different
countries
 and
that
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those
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countries
also
 speak other languages. For the American
English
branch
, the majority of
this
language
spoken
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is spoken
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 in
two
countries
, the USA and
Canada
.
Canada
 has
two
 branches that
divided
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are divided
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 by area, Anglophone
Canada
 and francophone
Canada
. We can clearly see six branches in the USA;
USA
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the USA
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 region is American Samoa,
west
 coast southern, midwest,
north east
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northeast
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 coast, Puerto Rico and the
last
 one is the Philippines. For the British
English
branch
, six different
countries
 have
west indies
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West Indies
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, Britishness,
Africa
, India-Pakistan, Australia and
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the far
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far east
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Far East
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. Jamaica and Barbados are
two
 regions for the
west indies
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West Indies
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,
whereas
west
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West
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Africa
, east
Africa
 and Angelo phone
Africa
is
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are
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 for
Africa
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African
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 territory. In Britishness, four languages
Irish
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are Irish
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,
English
, Welsh and Scottish,
while
 the form
of
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apply
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Indian
English
spoken
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is spoken
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 in
Indian-Pakistan
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India
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. In Australasia, the territory is
speaking
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spoken
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 in
two
countries
 Australia and New Zealand.
However
, the far east side
Malay
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of Malay
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 and
the
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apply
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Chinese
language
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languages
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spoken
Add a missing verb
are spoken
show examples
.
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