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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #travel #uk #countries #residents #visit #summarise #features #comparisons
The line chart illustrates
about
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the information
of
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about
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 travel to
UK
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the UK
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 and
travel
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travels
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 to other countries from the
UK
.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 the bar charts
shows
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show
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that
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apply
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the highest preferences from
the
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apply
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UK
residents
. At the
begging
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beginning
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 of the period (in 1979), the
number
 of
people
 who visited
to
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the
UK
 was higher than the
number
 of
the
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apply
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UK
residents
went
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who went
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to
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abroad by around 3
million
. After that, the
number
 of
the
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travelers
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travellers
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 who have
the
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UK
 nationality increased gently between 1979 and early 1984 to 20
million
. Meanwhile, at the same time, the
UK
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number of UK
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 visitors barely went up to about 11
million
. From
middle
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the middle
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 of 1984 to
second
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the second
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 half of
1989
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1989,
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 the
number
 of the
UK
residents
 who went
to
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abroad soared to 40
million
.
However
, the
number
 of foreigners who visited the
UK
 rose between 1989 and 1999, but it increased stably. In 1999, the
53millions
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53 million
UK
people
 visited a lot of countries. One of the most popular destinations
of
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the
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UK
residents
 was France. Around 12
million
people
 visited that country. At the same
time
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time,
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 9
million
people
 visited Spain and 4, 3 and 2
million
people
 traveled to USA, Greece, and Turkey respectively.
Overall
,
at
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during
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 the given periods, the
number
 of visits to the
UK
people
 was always lower than the
number
 of
people
 who have
the
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apply
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UK
 nationality travel
to
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abroad.
Also
, the
UK
people
 liked to go near
country
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countries
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such
 as France.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, residents, number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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