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The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart compares the data
of
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water
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 consumption (measured in percentage) for three different types of
usages
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 in six regions.
Overall
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, the statistics
was
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 represented
according to
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 the six particular nations which are North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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.
Additionally
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, the most significant amount of
water
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 is utilised for an agricultural purpose,
whereas
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 the least is for
a domestic and industrial usages
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domestic and industrial usage
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To begin
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, in Europe, 53% of
water
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 was exploited for an industrial reason, followed by North
America
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, at 48%.
On the other hand
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, the percentages in Central
Asia
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 and Africa were just 5% and 7%, respectively, accounting for the subordinate proportions among the other charts.
Furthermore
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, South
America
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 showed a higher rate for a domestic objective (19%), than for an industrial one (10%).
In contrast
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, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 had the same insignificant amounts of
water
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 spent for a domestic goal, at 7% for both regions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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