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The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart compares the data
of
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on
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water
 consumption (measured in percentage) for three different types of
usages
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usage
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 in six regions.
Overall
, the statistics
was
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were
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 represented
according to
 the six particular nations which are North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
 and South East
Asia
.
Additionally
, the most significant amount of
water
 is utilised for an agricultural purpose,
whereas
 the least is for
a domestic and industrial usages
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domestic and industrial usage
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.
To begin
, in Europe, 53% of
water
 was exploited for an industrial reason, followed by North
America
, at 48%.
On the other hand
, the percentages in Central
Asia
 and Africa were just 5% and 7%, respectively, accounting for the subordinate proportions among the other charts.
Furthermore
, South
America
 showed a higher rate for a domestic objective (19%), than for an industrial one (10%).
In contrast
, Central
Asia
 and South East
Asia
 had the same insignificant amounts of
water
 spent for a domestic goal, at 7% for both regions.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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