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the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did no go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did no go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar graph displays the destination of UK graduates and postgraduate
students
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 in 2008, making a comparison chart between the numbers of
students
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 during that year, in
this
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 comparison, they select categories as part-time, voluntary
work
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,
further
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 study, and unemployment, excluding full-time
work
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.
Overall
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,
further
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 study is the category with a lot of quantity of
students
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, being the number of
students
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 in graduated aspect major than postgraduate reports. The other significant feature of
this
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 bar is the voluntary
work
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 because in both graphs the statistic is lower in relation to other categories, being as most
students
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 do part-time jobs or think in other studies after the one that are doing now.
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 studies are the bar with most
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, especially graduate
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, reporting almost 30,000 and 2,725 in postgraduate
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, knowing the number of people in the second chart is below.
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, the second bigger category is part-time
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, with nearly 18 thousand on one side and just 2,535 academics on the other side.
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, it is significantly highlighted that voluntary
work
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 is the lowest in both columns whether is postgraduate with only 346
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as well as
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 graduated
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 with 3,500.
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, unemployment
students
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 had big reports in both data analyses, showing a considerable number of
students
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in
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apply
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overall
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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