the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did no go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did no go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The bar graph displays the destination of UK graduates and postgraduate
students
in 2008, making a comparison chart between the numbers of
students
during that year, in
this
comparison, they select categories as part-time, voluntary
work
,
further
study, and unemployment, excluding full-time
work
.
Overall
,
further
study is the category with a lot of quantity of
students
, being the number of
students
in graduated aspect major than postgraduate reports. The other significant feature of
this
bar is the voluntary
work
because in both graphs the statistic is lower in relation to other categories, being as most
students
do part-time jobs or think in other studies after the one that are doing now.
Further
studies are the bar with most
students
, especially graduate
students
, reporting almost 30,000 and 2,725 in postgraduate
students
, knowing the number of people in the second chart is below.
Also
, the second bigger category is part-time
work
, with nearly 18 thousand on one side and just 2,535 academics on the other side.
However
, it is significantly highlighted that voluntary
work
is the lowest in both columns whether is postgraduate with only 346
students
as well as
graduated
students
with 3,500.
Moreover
, unemployment
students
had big reports in both data analyses, showing a considerable number of
students
in
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