The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.
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There are diagrams that present the
water
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supply system in
Australia
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present
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at present
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and in
future
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. Both images have the same pointers,
such
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as a thin arrow that
presenting
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presents
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the pure
water
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, a white arrow that
presenting
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presents
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the
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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, and a black arrow that
presenting
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presents
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the waster
water
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.
Furthermore
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, the illustrations start with a dam or storage, continuing to the households, shops, factories, and
city
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, to
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water
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the water
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treatment plan, and the element below them is
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river
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a river
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.
According to
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the data, the current
water
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supply system in
Australia
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will allow the
water
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from the dam to the
city
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.
Moreover
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, the society can use the
water
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as they want,
for instance
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is
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the households that require
water
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for the family to take baths.
Further
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, the
waste
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water
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from the location may transferred to the
water
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treatment plant,
then
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it will flow to the
river
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.
However
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, the
city
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also
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produced
a
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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that
will
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eventually
gone
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go
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to the
river
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.
In contrast
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with the current system, the
future
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water
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supply mechanism in
Australia
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will not allow any
water
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to flow to the
river
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. The
future
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of
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apply
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the
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apply
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tactics will
go
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be
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smarter than the present
one
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ones
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because
it
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they
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makes
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the
water
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recycled back to the
city
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. To describe, the start of the
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will go the same, from the storage to the people.
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, both
storm
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and
waste
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water
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will have a way to the
water
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treatment plant, allowing them to restructure as
a
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apply
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pure
water
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,
grant
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and grant
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them to be used by the people in
Australia
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. In conclusion, there is a significant
different
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between the present and
future
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water
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supply
mechanism
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in
Australia
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. In the
future
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, the
storm
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and
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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will be recycled as pure
water
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,
hence
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the people can
consumed
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consume
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them.
Nevertheless
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, it is a positive improvement that will implement the zero
waste
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of the
water
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, australia, future, storm, city, river, waste with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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