The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart illustrates the
proportion
of drinking habits in the last
4 weeks based on survey
and the Correct article usage
the survey
number
of coffee
and tea consumed by people in five Australian cities.
Overall
, among five countries
, enjoying coffee
time at the café lead
the Wrong verb form
led
number
, with the exception in
Adelaide, Change preposition
of
while
bought
Wrong verb form
buying
the
fresh Correct article usage
apply
coffee
was not popular among three
categories.
Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart were the Correct article usage
the three
countries
with the largest coffee
and tea consumption, with more than 60 % people
enjoying Change preposition
of people
drink
at café. Fix the agreement mistake
drinks
This
number
was followed by buying instant coffee
with the second-largest proportion
in those countries
at roughly 45 % to 55%. In contrast
, buying the
fresh Correct article usage
apply
coffee
was in the minority among three
group Correct article usage
the three
countries
.
On the other hand
, the countries
with the lowest number
consumption were Brisbane and Adelaide. The proportion
of drinking instant coffee
and drinking at café had the same proportion
about 50%, while
bought
fresh Wrong verb form
buying
coffee
also
was not popular in this
cities, being the lowest Correct determiner usage
these
number
from 5 countries
and drinking habit categories.
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