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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it's construction in 1950. Summarise the information and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it's construction in 1950. Summarise the information and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent
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The provided maps demonstrate information regarding
gradual
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the gradual
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 development of West
Park
secondary
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Secondary School
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school
 from 1950, the year of initial construction, to 2010. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that most amenities had been converted and reorganized in the 60-year period. In 1950, the area of West
Park
junior high
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Junior High School
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school
 was
densed
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filled
 with houses,
a
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farmland, the
school
 itself, and a playground. After 30 years, a major renovation has changed the former farming area into a sports field,
while
 the houses
splitted
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split
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 into a car
park
 and an expansion of the
school
 building (science block).
However
, the playground remained untouched.
Moreover
, 2010 witnessed a
further
 transformation which replaced the old location of
sports
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the sports
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 field
into
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 a widened area of the car
park
.
Therefore
, the sports field was reconstructed on the left side of the playground.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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