In the past, most working people had only one job. However, nowadays, more and more people have more than one job at the same time. What are the reasons for this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more than one job?

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Nowadays, we can see the growth of the number of
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, who have several jobs. In
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as well as
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and cons of
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trend. The main reason for
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to take part-
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job
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is that they are under financial pressure.
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, prices for all goods and services, including really important,
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as energy, housing and food dramatically rise. Another reason
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is increasing the number of individuals, who work remotely.
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most
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people
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, who traditionally work at
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or
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a plant, these employees do not spend
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to commute
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in
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rush hour.
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, they have additional
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, which they prefer to spend on earning money. Extra employment has some benefits. One of the most significant is that
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increase their welfare.
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they can afford some supplementary expenses
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, cars or private school for their children.
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,
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way has the drawbacks.
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, who have several occupations, do not have an opportunity to spend their
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on the family. It leads to increasing
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tensions between spouses and, in some cases may be
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out
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, the number of divorces because
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one of the partners does not have
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time
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for the family has grown
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30
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the
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five years.
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,
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to have additional
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has its merits.
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This phenomena
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may be caused by financial pressure on
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or increasing of the popularity of remote work.
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,
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, who have several jobs, earn more money and can afford extra expenses.
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, it has consequences
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lack
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a lack
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of free
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic stability
  • Multiple income streams
  • Gig economy
  • Freelance work
  • Contract work
  • Professional development
  • Financial security
  • Job market
  • Diversified income
  • Burnout
  • Skill set
  • Networking opportunities
  • Work-life balance
  • Mental well-being
  • Time management
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