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The given bar chart illustrate the proportions of divorce in two European countries (Finland, Sweden) from 2011 to 2015. These values are measured in percentages.

The given bar chart illustrate the proportions of divorce in two European countries (Finland, Sweden) from 2011 to 2015. These values are measured in percentages.
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 given bar graph
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 the detail about the rate of
divorce
 in two different nations namely
Finland
 and
Sweden
 between 2011
to
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and
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 2015 . Overview , the proportion of
sweden
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Sweden
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divorce
 cases
were
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was
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maximum
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higher
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then
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than
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Finland
thought out
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throughout
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 the period
expect
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except
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 2015 in which
finland
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Finland
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stand for
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stood
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 higher . As per the
provide
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provided
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 information that, in 2011 the percentage of
divorce
 was below
than
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apply
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40%
for
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in
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finland
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Finland
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 and
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almost
 45%
was
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apply
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in
second given
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second-given
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nations
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. Surprisingly ,in the
nest
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next
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 given year , the difference of 17% was noticed in both
nation
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nations
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 in which
Sweden
 stood for
large
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a large
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proprotion
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proportion
proportions
 that was
alomst
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almost
 half .
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 ,
the
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Finland
 was seen
around
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at around
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 40% and
Sweden
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Sweden's
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divorce
 rate was roughly
48%in
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48 in
 2013 . Probing
futher
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further
, the
divorce
 rate was
approxmately
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approximately
same
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the same
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 in both
nation
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nations
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 which
was calculate
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was calculated
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less
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at less
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 than 45% in 2014 .
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Interestingly
, the percentage of
divorce
 was above
than
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apply
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41% and 4%less
form
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from
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this
 nation was
withnessed
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witnessed
 in
Sweden
 in the
last
 given time period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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