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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and pie charts illustrate the yearly budget of police in a Britain region between 2017 and 2018
as well as
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 the source of money and the allocation. Units are measured in million euros.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the budget allocations in both years were roughly similar,
same
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the same
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 goes for how they were used. Regarding the budget source, the National Government contributed the highest amount among other categories throughout the given period, which started at 175.5 and slightly rose to 177.8 in the following year.
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, Local Taxes stood at 91.2 in 2017 before moderately climbing to 102.3 in 2018.
On the contrary
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, other sources roughly persisted around 38 in 2017
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 the other. In terms of money usage, salaries took the largest proportion in both periods, which stood at 75% in 2017 before experiencing a small fall of 6% in the second year.
Consequently
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, the expenditure on technology grew from 8% in 2017 to 14% by the end of the observed period.
Nonetheless
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, building and transport had exactly the same percentage in both 2017 and 2018, which is 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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