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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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An island is described
in
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on
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 maps,
some
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and some
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 visitor facilities are added
in
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to
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 that place. The diagrams illustrate the condition of an island before and after manufacturing of different basic requirements
such
 as
,
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 reception area, cottages, tracks, paths and so on.
In addition
, the place consists of 100
meteres
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metres
meters
. The first figure mentions the situation of an island which only
contain
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contains
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 a beach or some bamboo trees. But in the second one, there
are
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is
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development
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the development
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 of various luxuries for tourists. There is
also
 availability of yachts by which they have access to the bridge, and
it
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is
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 attached
with
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to
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 the seashore.
Furthermore
, motor vehicle tracks are built which
surrounds
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surround
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 the reception building and
the
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apply
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leads toward
restaurant
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the restaurant
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.
Moreover
, basic requirements of rooms are
also
 fulfilled where they can spend time to get some rest.
While
,
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 paths are formed throughout the accommodation area and
then
 it brings toward
beach
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the beach
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. Swimming
spot
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spots
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 os
also
 available at
beach point
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Beach Point
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.
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