Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are some ways for
students
to
study
, classical learning or online learning. Some people believe that
students
who
study
in a classroom
is
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more effective than studying online at their home. But,
this
essay will discuss why studying online gives more benefits than studying
at
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in
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the classroom. Online learning gives
students
flexibility, they can learn from everywhere
especially
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, especially
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from home. They can access many
study
materials by
connect
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connecting
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to the internet.
As a result
, they have a lot of time to
study
deeply on the subject they learn.
For example
, when they
study
about
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Hydrological cycles, they not only read the modules from the websites
,
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but
also
they can watch a video which has been provided on it.
This
method makes
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the student
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student
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students
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understand easily, which can lead to
get
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getting
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more
score
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scores
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into
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for studying
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study
exam
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exams
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. So that, teachers are effortless to face to face with their
students
.
On the other hand
, by learning online
student
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students
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do not need to spend much money for semester
fee
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fees
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.
Students
have to pay for
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the facility
a facility
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facility
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facilities
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which
has
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have
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been built
from
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by
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the colleges.
For example
, in
USA
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the USA
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, some universities allocate more budget to keep their facilities in
a good conditions
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a good condition
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.
As a consequence
,
this
will certainly burden the
students
.
the
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apply
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online learning
minimize
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this
condition, allowing student
save
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their money
to
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for
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other needs. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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online learning is more beneficial than
study
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studying
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in the classroom because they have a
flexibility
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flexible
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time to
study
and they don't need to spend
an
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apply
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extra money to visit a college or university.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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